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the following bar chart shows the different modes of transport used to travel to and from work in one European city in 1960, 1980 and 2000. summarize the information and make comparison. writ at least 150 words

the following bar chart shows the different modes of transport used to travel to and from work in one European city in 1960, 1980 and 2000. summarize the information and make comparison. writ at least 150 words
The bar chart
ellaborates
Correct your spelling
elaborates
, regarding one of the European
city
Fix the agreement mistake
cities
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, about the various methods of commuting support to travel to and from work , during the period 1960,1980,2000, which is expressed in
precentage
Correct your spelling
percentage
.
Linking Words
overall
Fix capitalization
Overall
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, the trend shows the
avarage
Correct your spelling
average
 used mode of transportation
all
Correct determiner usage
apply
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through out
Use the right word
throughout
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, maximum was for the years 1980,
while
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 other
mode
Fix the agreement mistake
modes
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 of transportation had a fluctuating graph. To commence,
during
Change preposition
in
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1980
Punctuation problem
1980,
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 the mode of transportation
by citizens used
Correct word order
used by citizens
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 in
a
Correct article usage
apply
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Europor
Correct your spelling
Europe
the highest was
Correct word order
was the highest
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bus
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apply
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, which was 25%, followed by
year
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apply
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1960 and 2000,
near to
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with
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 20% and more than 156% respectively. On the
contrarty
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contrary
,
peoples
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people
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commuted
Wrong verb form
commuting
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 by car
was
Verb problem
reached
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the
Correct pronoun usage
its
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 peak
during
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in
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 2000, it was 40%, it dropped to 25% 1980
,
Punctuation problem
;
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however
Linking Words
, in
1960
Punctuation problem
1960,
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 it
touched
Verb problem
reached
show examples
the
Correct pronoun usage
its
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 lowest rate of 5%.
On the other hand
Linking Words
, the group using
bike
Fix the agreement mistake
bikes
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 was
Change preposition
at the
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the
Correct pronoun usage
its
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 maximum in 1960, it showed to 25%
, after
Punctuation problem
. After
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 2 decades , it
fallen
Wrong verb form
fell
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 by 5%,
by
Correct word choice
and by
show examples
 2000, it again
stiff
Correct word choice
apply
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fall
Replace the word
fell
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 to 5%.
Subsequently
Linking Words
, people travelling by foot
was
Correct subject-verb agreement
were
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 top in the beginning years, which after 20 years,
decline
Wrong verb form
declined
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 more than 15% and above 5% respectively.

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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fall" was used 2 times.
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