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Band 4.5

Access to clean water is a basic human right. Therefore every home should have a water supply that is provided free of charge. Do you agree or disagree?

Nowadays, clean
water
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 is one of the most important things we need in our
life
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lives
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, but many believe that bills for clean
water
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 must be free for citizens. I partly agree with
this
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 statement. On the one hand, clean
water
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 is necessary for life
so
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, so
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 free of charge is reasonable. People need to pay many types of duties
and
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, and
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 living
water
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 is one of them.
Although
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 the income is not always
being
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upgraded, the price of
water
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 is going up day by day.
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, citizens must use clean
water
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 for their household and self-worth
so
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, so
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 the prices may increase
according to
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 the number of family members, but not all of the members have
enough
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the
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 ability
for working
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to work
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. Since that, the burden of expenses is very hard for the other members in the family.
On the other hand
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, it is unfair for governments to pay all of the safe
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water’s
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water
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 charges. The population is improving
by
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over
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 time, so the facilities in
water
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 factories must handle more than
thought
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they thought
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. Each step of treatment pays many times
and
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over and
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 money.
For instance
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, the
water
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 volume is too much
so
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, so
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that
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apply
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the government needs to have increasingly modern machinery. If the government pays all of the potable
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water’
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water
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 bills, it will be a big financial burden for them, and they will not have enough for
paying
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apply
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the other problems in
a
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the
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 country. Clean
water
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 is very important for each of us, but it's hard for
government’s
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the government’s
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paying
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pay
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.
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for.
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 We must pay ourselves
and
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, and
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 the government may
have
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offer
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 preferential or reasonable prices for clean
water
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 to help citizens
easily live
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live easily
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.

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Structure
Make one clear view at the end to show your main point.
Coherence
Use simple link words like also, but, and for example to tie ideas.
Task
Add one or two easy examples that fit the topic.
Language
Check grammar and avoid hard words.
Task
The essay shows a view and tries to talk about both sides.
Coherence
Some parts have a clear reason.
Structure
The order of ideas is simple and easy to follow.
Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • basic
  • human
  • right
  • water
  • supply
  • provided
  • free
  • charge
  • agree
  • disagree
  • health
  • essential
  • sick
  • diseases
  • supports
  • education
  • children
  • focus
  • learning
  • searching
  • better
  • futures
  • reduce
  • poverty
  • families
  • save
  • money
  • spend
  • important
  • needs
  • promote
  • equality
  • chance
  • access
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