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the following bar chart shows the different modes of transport used to travel to and from work in one European city in 1960, 1980 and 2000. summarize the information and make comparison. writ at least 150 words

the following bar chart shows the different modes of transport used to travel to and from work in one European city in 1960, 1980 and 2000. summarize the information and make comparison. writ at least 150 words
The given bar chart illustrates the three different types of ways which was used to go to the workplace in a European city in 3 different
years
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 from 1960 to 2000.
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Overall
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 it can be seen that, in the past
years
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,
public
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the public
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 were mostly walking to their
job place
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workplace
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,
whereas
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 in the most recent
years
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,
traveling
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travelling
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 by
car
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 became more popular. In 1960, a little under 40% of
people
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 walked to their workplace , and one fourth of them used
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a
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bike
ride
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apply
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. where the least amount of
people
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 used private
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car
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cars
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 and the use of buses was below 20%. In the next 20
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years
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years,
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 the trend changed dramatically
,
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;
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 buses became the most popular mode of transportation , carrying a little over 25% of the total. where
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car
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the car
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, bike and foot users percentage was 23% to 18%.
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Furthermore
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 in the year 2000, the majority of
people
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 used
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car
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cars
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, about 35% and
a
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the
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 least amount of
people
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 used bikes. The
amount
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number
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 of workers who
traveled
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travelled
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 by bus and
foot
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on foot
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 was 16% and 9% respectively.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words years, car, people with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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