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The pictures show the changes of a park from 1980 to the present day. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The images provide key information on how the park changed from 1980 until the present day. These include five random items. The green plant, the chair , the red plant, the table and the activity. Both of them have significant points. The units are measured in
years
Use synonyms
 On one hand, in terms of sharp addition,
according to
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 the given data,
according to
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 the primary form, in 1980, there were several tips, 1980 at almost 10
years
Use synonyms
.
First,
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the significant alteration points appeared clearly, in the red garden, at about 3
years
Use synonyms
.
However
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, the active indicator appeared significantly in 1980, on one side.
In addition
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, the sports space appeared rapidly in 1980, on the other side.
On the other hand
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, in terms of rapid elimination,
according to
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 the image below,
according to
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 the modern form, in 2025, there are many elimination marks after 1990.
Firstly
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, the dramatic constant place appeared clearly in the chair, at almost 12
years
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.
Correct word choice
old.
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However
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, the wait park was removed in 2025,
while
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 the blue park was added in 2025.

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task response
Task: Say the main changes in the park from 1980 to now. Pick 2 or 3 key facts and write a short, clear view.
coherence cohesion
Coherence: Use clear order. Start with a short intro, then give the main points, and finish with a short end.
vocabulary grammar
Sentences: Keep them short. Use simple words.
coherence cohesion
Linking: Use words like and, but, then, so to show how ideas go together.
task response
Be exact: Do not add wrong facts. Say what you can see in the picture.
content
The writer tries to show changes over time.
focus
There are some facts about the park in both times.
structure
The idea of comparing 1980 with today is seen.
Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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