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The pictures show the changes of a park from 1980 to the present day. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant

The images provide key information on how the park changed from 1980 until the present day. These include five random items. The green plant, the chair , the red plant, the table and the activity. Both of them have significant points. The units
measured
Verb problem
are measured
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 in
years
Use synonyms
 On one hand, in terms of sharp addition,
according to
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 the given data,
according to
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 the primary form, in 1980, there were several tips,
in
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apply
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1980
,
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apply
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 at almost 10
years
Use synonyms
.
Correct word choice
old.
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First,
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the significant alteration points appeared clearly, in the red garden, at about 3
years
Use synonyms
.
However
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, the active indicator appeared significantly in 1980, on one side.
In addition
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, the sports space appeared rapidly in 1980, on the other side.
On the other hand
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, in terms of rapid elimination,
according to
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 the image below,
according to
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 the modern form, in 2025, there are many elimination marks
,
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apply
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 after 1990.
Firstly
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, the dramatic constant place appeared clearly in the chair, at almost 12
years
Use synonyms
.
Correct word choice
old.
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However
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, the wait park was removed in 2025,
while
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 the blue park was added
,
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apply
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 in 2025,
at
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almost
year
Correct article usage
a year
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.
Rephrase
later.
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task
Give a clear view of what happened in the park. State the main change and use clear dates.
coherence
Use a simple order. Start with first and then use next, after that, and finally to show steps.
language
Use plain, short words. Avoid long or hard words and fixed phrases that are not clear.
data
Name the items you see and use the numbers from the picture, like 1980 and 2025.
idea
Some attempt to compare past and present is clear in parts.
structure
There is effort to point to changes in time.
Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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