The diagram below shows the life cycle of a salmon, from eggs to adult fish.

The figure depicts how the life cycle of a salmon develops from eggs to adult

fish

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, there are eight stages, which can be divided generally into spawning, incubating, rearing, and migrating.

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this

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cycle

also

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involves three areas, which are

river

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the river

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estuary

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the estuary

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, and

ocean

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the ocean

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. At the initial stage, the salmon

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fish

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spawns in the river. Having

spawn

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, the

fish

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will

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produce other initial living creatures, which must be incubated

for

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several times. As

the

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result of incubation, emergences suffer

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before

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the

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they grow into freshwater rearing.

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, after the

fishes

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fish

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grows from freshwater rearing, they change into estuary rearing in

estuary

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the estuary

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area, which have

bigger

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a bigger

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size than before. Afterwards, they will migrate to

ocean

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the ocean

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but still same in rearing areas. The

fishes

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not only grow but

also

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matured

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mature

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. Ultimately, after the

fish

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are

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adequate in spawning characteristics, the

fish

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migrate to the first place (river). The cycle will

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start again from the

initial

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beginning

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".

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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 70%.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words fish with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.

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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.

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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.

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1
Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

157 words

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