Some people think that children should not watch television because it has negative effects, while some think that television helps children. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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others think that it actually aids
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in their learning process.
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essay intends to delve into both perspectives
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believe that despite some negative effects, there
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a lot which assist the younger in many aspects of life. On the one hand, watching TV regularly can lead to many bad influences on kids, as it takes a lot of
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from their study and playtime , which leads to poor performance in academic life and adverse physical health. Some research shows that violent behaviour has been seen in kids
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uncontrolled screentime. Some of the programmes aren't child-friendly and
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can get the wrong ideas , and exposure to extreme scenes might nurture their
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brain in the wrong way.
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there is some evidence of sleep deprivation among the kids who had more screentime.
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, many good shows which are designed with good ideas and facts are helpful for
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to learn in an effective way.
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can learn many basic words with the educational shows,
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learn about the culture, history, science and art in a fun way.
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, learning by watching television with family
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builds strong relationships among the members and exchanges their knowledge meantime.
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a guided screen
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is beneficial, like choosing age-appropriate shows, setting a
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limit and adding
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an educational
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series. In conclusion, I believe a balance watch is the best.
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should be allowed to watch screens to learn and develop their knowledge and entertainment, keeping that mind that
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shouldn't conflict with their regular study
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and physical activities.

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Plan before you write. In each paragraph have one main idea and a short example.
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Use simple links to show how ideas relate, like and, but, also, however.
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Make your view clear in the intro and end with it in the conclusion.
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Give 2 or 3 clear examples that are easy to prove.
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The essay speaks on both sides of the topic.
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It ends with a view that balance is best.
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It gives ideas on how TV can help learning.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • watch
  • watching
  • TV
  • television
  • child
  • children
  • learn
  • learning
  • good
  • bad
  • time
  • limit
  • health
  • sleep
  • ads
  • advertisements
  • show
  • shows
  • family
  • parents
  • talk
  • discuss
  • idea
  • balance
  • safe
  • age
  • planning
  • plan
  • screen time
  • story
  • fact
  • culture
  • science
  • art
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