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In the future, nobody will buy printed newspaper or book because they will be ableto read everything they want online without paying. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give reasons for you answer and include any relevant examples from own knowledge or experience.

Many
people
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 believe that in the future, nobody will buy printed newspapers because they will be able to read everything they want online without paying.
People
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 who
love
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books
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 not only enjoy reading
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apply
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 but
also
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love
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 the feeling of touching a physical
book
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. The fact is, in the future
technology
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, technology
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 will develop rapidly, and one of its impacts is that many things will shift to online platforms. Especially readers who enjoy physical
books
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 may start to read online, since now there are many applications or innovations,
such
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 as Kindle or iBooks, that allow
people
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 to read using a device made specifically for reading.
This
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 technology makes it easier for
people
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 to read articles or even
books
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 without paying. Another reason
people
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 prefer online reading is that they do not need to carry
books
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; they only need to bring one gadget.
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,
people
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 who are addicted to or truly
love
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 reading often find that it is not only about the story or the words inside the
book
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. When they touch the paper, feel the cover with their hands, and place the
book
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 on their shelf as part of their home, the experience feels different.
Secondly
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, reading a newspaper or a printed
book
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 feels different from reading on a phone or
gadget
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a gadget
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. Sometimes,
people
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 look for the sensation that only printed materials can offer. In conclusion, even though technology will continue to develop, it does not mean that
people
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 who
love
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 reading will stop buying physical
books
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 or newspapers. I believe many
people
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 will switch to online reading, but that does not mean printed
books
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 or newspapers will completely disappear.

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structure
Plan your essay with 3 main ideas and put them in order.
coherence
Use linking words to tie ideas, for example, 'also', 'but', 'so', 'therefore'.
examples
Give clear examples from life or reading. Use small facts or numbers if possible.
grammar
Check small mistakes. Use short, clear lines; avoid long, hard sentences.
content
The view is clear and the idea is balanced.
structure
There is a good end that sums up the view.
analysis
The idea of online read vs print is shown well with simple ideas.
Your opinion

Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.

If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.

Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

Here are examples of instructions that require you to give your opinion:

...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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