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Many cars nowadays are driven by computers, not people. Do you think the advantages of autonomous cars outweigh the disadvantages?

In today's time, some vehicles are being driven by computers
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i
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dont
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don't
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that is
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 good for
the
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society, because technology can't react the same as a person would and
electricaly
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electrically
 connected objects can shut down
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 minute. As for putting all
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responsibility
 on technology, it can react to things that it misunderstands.
Devices
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 can't always detect objects as they are in
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reality, because it is programmed to assume things and not what they actually are, making situations in reality dangerous for a person in the
car
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. As an example, in many modern cars, there is the automatic danger brake, where the
car
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 brakes when something suddenly comes behind or infront of the
car
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, and as it has happened in real life situations, the
car
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 brakes when it assumes an object of danger has come up, but in reality nothing has, so the
car
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 makes a dangerous brake that can put the cars behind in an unlikely situation.
Electricaly contorelled
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Electrically controlled
devices
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 can out of the blue get a technical problem that can make the device shut down in a
secound
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second
. Technological
devices
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all are
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are all
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 programmed to work in one way, but when something doesn't
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align
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 with what is programmed in the system, the device protests and starts to
glich
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glitch
 and maybe even shut down.
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, when a person has a phone and something in the programme
gliches
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glitches
 and the phone's screen freezes, there is no possible way to do anything on it, the only solution is to restart the phone by shutting it down or by getting help
by
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profesionals
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professionals
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people
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 start to use more self-driven cars, but it
makes
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the
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people in the
car
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 in danger, because the
car
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 can react to objects that it can assume only because it is programmed to do it
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also
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technologicaly
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technological
used
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devices
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 can have
aproblem
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a problem
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 minute, which results in the device shutting down.

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structure
Plan with a clear plan. Start with a short intro, then two body parts, and a short end.
content
Give both sides a bit. Say one good point and one bad point, then say which side wins.
flow
Use more small link words to show how ideas fit. Use words like first, also, but, so, finally.
content
Give clear, easy examples that show the point in a simple way.
content
The idea of risk from tech is easy to see in the text.
structure
A single example (auto brake) is used to show a point.
Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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