the chart below shows some of the most reported issues among people living in UK cities in 2008.

The bar chart illustrates a few well-known problems among the citizens of major cities in the UK in 2008.
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, these metropolises were Newcastle, Belfast, Birmingham, Cardiff, Manchester, Glasgow, and London. Which
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, and training were the highest issues in cities,
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air pollution was the least considered. Both
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and training were mostly higher than 50%, exceptions were capital,
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Glasgow, which had a lower percentage of
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services, Newcastle and Manchester, which had low percentages of
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and training.
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being the air pollution was mostly lower than 10%. Cardiff, Manchester , and London were higher than the 10% mark. In general, people who live in urban areas
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more concerned about
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Use synonyms culturedisciplineimprovementinformationlearningliteracyscholarshipschoolingsciencestudy It is important to use synonyms in your writing, as you will lose marks if you repeat words from the question and use the same words in your essay over and over. If you do that, it will show the examiner that you have a limited vocabulary
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you want to do the opposite for a high band score. and training,
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that air pollution was the least worrisome issue.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "whereas".
Basic structure: Use less body paragraphs.
Basic structure: Change the sixth paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words health, education with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fifth paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the sixth paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the eighth paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • affordable housing
  • urban areas
  • overcrowding
  • homelessness
  • traffic congestion
  • car ownership
  • public transportation systems
  • commuting times
  • air pollution
  • industrial activities
  • air quality
  • green spaces
  • urbanization
  • mental health
  • crime rates
  • socio-economic factors
  • sense of security
  • waste management
  • waste disposal
  • recycling
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