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The graph below shows the quantities of goods transported in the UK between 1974 and 2002 by four different modes of transport.

The line graph illustrates key information about the quantities of goods transported in the United Kingdom from 1974 to 2002 by four
ways
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modes
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 of
transport
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. The units are measured in
million
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tonnes
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.
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, it can be clearly seen from the chart that the highest kind
modes
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of modes
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 of
transport
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 was road,
whereas
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 the lowest was pipeline in all
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period
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periods
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. Looking at the details, we can notice that road mode of
transport
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 slightly increased from
1974
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1974,
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 at approximately 70
million
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tonnes
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until
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, until
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 the end of
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period
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the period
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 at just under 95
million
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tonnes
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. As regards water mode of
transport
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 started nearly 40
million
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tonnes
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through
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were transported through
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 four years, after that slightly rose
until
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to
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 approximately 48
million
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tonnes
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until
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by
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 1982,
then
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 it remained steady until 1997, and
the
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at the
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 end of the
period
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 sharply increased
until
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to
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 around 62
million
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tonnes
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. In terms of rail, in
first
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the first
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 five years and
end
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the last
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 five years
was
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were
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same
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the same
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 value at 40
million
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tonnes
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, and the
middel
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middle
 of
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period
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the period
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was
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apply
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fluctuated between 40 and 30
million
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tonnes
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.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words transport, million, tonnes, period with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Transported goods
  • Quantities
  • Trends
  • Modes of transport
  • Rail
  • Road
  • Water
  • Pipeline
  • Fluctuations
  • Predominance
  • Economic influences
  • Societal changes
  • Technological advancements
  • Environmental impact
  • Growth
  • Steady increase/decrease
  • Comparison
  • Period (e.g., decade, years)
  • Examination
  • Implications
  • Analysis
  • Conclusion
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