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The tables below give information about sales of Fairtrade*-labelled coffee and bananas in 1999 and 2004 in five European countries. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. *Fairtrade: a category of products for which farmers from developing countries have been paid an officially agreed fair price.

The two tables illustrate key information about sales of Fairtrade-labelled coffee and bananas in 1999 and 2004 in five European countries. The units are measured in
millions
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 of
Euros
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, it can be clearly seen from
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the tables
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 that in terms of coffee, the highest was in
Switzerland
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 in 1999, and the United Kingdom was the highest in 2004. As regards bananas, the highest was in
Switzerland
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 in
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both years. Looking at coffee, we can notice that the biggest
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 were in
UK
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the UK
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, at
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from
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 1.5
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millions
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million
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of
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Euros
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 in 1999 to 20
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millions
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of
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Euros
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 in 2004, and
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Switzerland
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in Switzerland
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 was double
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 started 3
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millions
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of
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Euros
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 in 1999. Looking at bananas, all countries increased from 1999 to
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2004,
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 except Sweden decreased from 1.8
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Euros
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 to just one.
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,
Switzerland
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 rose just over three double from 15
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millions
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of
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Euros
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, as regards
UK
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the UK
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, it rose above five times from a million
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Euros
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 82%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words millions, euros, switzerland with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "tables" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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