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Band 4.5

Living in a country where you have to speak a foreign language can cause serious social problems, as well as practical problems. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

It is clear that
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 living in a foreign country has its own benefits and drawbacks to consider. The social issues of living abroad
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 topic to discuss in many countries. I strongly agree with the idea that living in a different country has its own issues. First of all, a social problem is the
language
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 barrier, which is the most important issue. By
this
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 I mean, it has the potential to cause many problems, like
lack
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a lack
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 of communication with other people,
lack
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a lack
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 of confidence, and feeling
anxiety
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anxious
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.
For example
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, when you go to another Country to live
while
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 you are not able to speak their
language
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, you can't make friends or create
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apply
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relationship
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relationships
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 or communicate with others.
Secondly
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, another practical problem would be misunderstanding.
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, when you are not aware of behaving well
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, and
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 your
behaviors
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behaviours
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 and vocabulary in many situations are unsuitable, which leads to misconceptions.
For instance
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, in Iran, body
Language
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 and speaking are directly related to each other, so Foreigners who come to Iran should be aware of the speaking and the body
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 in order to
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avoid misunderstanding
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.
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, finding a job is really hard.
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, an individual who works in a foreign restaurant may because a
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 barrier
,
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 cannot serve
as well as
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 other work force, so he/she
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 negative feedback from customers. In conclusion, I
am
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agree with the idea that
drawbacks
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the drawbacks
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 of living abroad
is
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are
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outweight
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outweighed
 for individuals who want to live without any knowledge
about
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of
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 the
language
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. In my opinion, they should
before
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be before
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imigration
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immigration
, being dominant
in
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In
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 the
language
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 to avoid these issues.

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structure
Plan your answer with a clear plan: intro, 2 body paragraphs, and a short conclusion.
structure
State your view in the first sentence of the introduction and keep it to one idea per paragraph.
grammar
Use simple, short sentences and clear grammar to get your point across.
content
Give one clear example for each main point to back your idea.
lexical
Check use of words and make sure you use the same meaning for key ideas.
content
The writer has a clear view that living abroad has drawbacks.
structure
There is a basic structure with introduction, body and conclusion.
content
Some good effort to use examples.
Fully explain your ideas

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • linguistic proficiency
  • cross-cultural communication
  • miscommunication
  • social integration
  • linguistic alienation
  • cultural dissonance
  • language acquisition
  • communication breakdown
  • interpreter services
  • language courses
  • bilingualism
  • multilingualism
  • language barrier
  • effective communication
  • cultural assimilation
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