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Some people believe that governments should invest more in public transportation, while others think that improving roads and highways is more important. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

A large proportion of society claims that the governments should spend more on public
transportation
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 rather than
improving
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on improving
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roads
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 and highways. From my perspective, public
transportation
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 is more vital because most
people
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 do not
use
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 it
due to
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 the
low-quality
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low quality
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 of buses and motorways, and they prefer to
use
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 their private cars. Devoting more
money
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 to
this
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 matter is a
game changer
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game-changer
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 for every country.
To begin
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 with, using
personal
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a personal
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 car is one of the most important
casue
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causes
 of air pollution. Investing more
money
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on
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in
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 public
transportation
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 can help our environment. It decreases emissions and improves
weather
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air
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 quality. If the government purchases more buses,
people
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 will
use
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 them for daily
usage
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travel
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.
For instance
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,
In
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in
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Switzerland
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Switzerland,
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 the
goverment
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government
 devoted more
money
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for
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to
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 public
transportation
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.
As a result
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, the sales of personal cars dropped by 50%, and most
people
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prefered
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preferred
 to
use
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bus
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the bus
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 or subway.
In addition
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, individuals spend a
lot
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 of
money
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 on
transportation
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 every day. Public
transportation
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 is usually more
afordable
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affordable
 for them.
Consequently
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, they can save a
lot
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 of
money
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.
This
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 helps families to spend more
money
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 on other aspects of
lives
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their lives
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,
such
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 as buying healthy foods and books.
On the other hand
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, the safety of
roads
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 and highways is crucial.
People
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use
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these
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this
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infrstructure
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infrastructure
 on
daily
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a daily
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 basis. If the government does not devote enough
money
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for
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to
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this
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 matter, it will cause a
lot
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 of accidents. In the
long-term
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long term
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, it will damage public trust.
Moreover
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,
this
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 kind of
ficilities
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facilities
have
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has
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 a huge impact on
economy
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the economy
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. First of all, it can improve tourism, and
then
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 it
develop
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develops
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 import and export of commodities.
For example
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, Egypt has a
lot
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 of historical sites
but
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, but
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 they did not have
convenient
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a convenient
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 path. Nowadays, they have
a
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an
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 impressive tourism industry after allocating more budget to rebuild
roads
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.
To conclude
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,
roads
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 and highways are a huge matter to consider, and they are influential;
however
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, public
transportation
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 offers a quick and
fesiable
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feasible
 way to tackle a
lot
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 of current problems, including
economy
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the economy
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 and
environment
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the environment
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.

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grammar
Fix many spell and form mistakes; use simple words and short sentence where possible.
coherence
Make ideas clear and flow. Link one idea to the next with simple words.
content
Use more precise and clear examples that fit your point.
editing
Check capital and spelling of key words (government, Bus, road) and use correct punctuation.
content
Clear view is stated.
coherence
There is some good link use and a plan.
content
An example from another country is used.
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