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Band 4.5

Many people argue that resturants should be required ti disclose the nutritional information of the dishes they serve. Do the advantage of this outweigh the disadvantages?

Nowadays, many
resturants
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restaurants
 are opened with
wide
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a wide
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 range of food
vareity
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variety
. A large number of people
emphasize
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emphasise
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 that every dish should be described with nutritional information
in
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on
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 menu cards,
while
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 other holds
opposite
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the opposite
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 side of it and
not
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are not
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 ready to disclose any details. The first and foremost benefit
to display
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of displaying
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 nutritional facts on display is
enhances
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to enhance
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resturants
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resturants'
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 prestige and loyalty
towrds
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towards
customer
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customers
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, which leads to
higher
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a higher
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 number of
customers
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 to their place.
Also
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, when
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a resturant
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resturant
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restaurant
 commits to show these
informations
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information
, it means the owner of the place is honest and well-being
for
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of
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 their
customers
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. To exemplify, generally people
more
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apply
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prefers
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prefer
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 to eat at the restaurants which are good
at
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in
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 the
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of nutritional
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nutritional
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nutrition
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level
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apply
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, as it shows their honesty towards them.
Moreover
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, having nutritional facts on food
dish
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dishes
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 makes people aware
about
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of
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 the intake of their own food, like what is best for their
immnuity
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immunity
 and how much they can have. In some cases, it prevents
customers
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 from having allergies
from
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to
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 particular things,
such
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 as
,
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apply
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 dairy and gluten products. On the opposite side of it, displaying dietary information on every
plates
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plate
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 can be
cost consuming
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costly
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. It can be more expensive for small businesses.
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, research has shown that 30% of
newley
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newly
 opened
resturants
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restaurants
has
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have
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 denied
to hire
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hiring
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 professional nutrisits is out of their budget.
Second
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The second
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 reason
of
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for
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 not disclosing these details on the board is that it may be misleading
,
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;
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 sometimes
nutrition
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the nutrition
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 level
is vary
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varies
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 for different
portion
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portions
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 of serving plates.
To
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Conclude
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conclude
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, serving a plate with dietary
inforamtion
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information
 is a good option to foster
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customers
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customers'
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 trust towards the place
,
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;
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however
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, it can be an expensive option for small businesses.

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grammar
Fix spell and form of words so the text is easy to read.
cohesion
Use linking words to show how ideas go with each other.
structure
Add a short plan in the intro and end with a short line in the end.
content
Give more exact examples to back ideas, not too general.
style
Keep to one idea in each sentence and check word choice.
content
The writer tries to show both sides of the issue.
structure
There is a clear ending that sums up the view.
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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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