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The graph below shows the sales of children’s books, adult fiction and educational books between 2002 and 2006 in one country.

The presented line graph compares the sales of three different types of
books
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, including children’s, adult fiction, and educational from 2002 to 2006 in a country.
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, there are a number of changes over the 4-year periods. It is evident that the sales of educational and children’s
books
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 saw a significant rise
at the end
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 of the year.
While
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 adult fiction lost popularity over the given time period. Observing the graph in detail, the
sale
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sales
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 of kids’
books
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 increased sharply from 2002 to 2003, making up 42
million
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dollars
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. After that, it
almost
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 unchanged, but it rose slightly to 46
million
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dollars
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 over the 2-year
periods
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period
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. Surprisingly, children’s
books
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 experienced a remarkable upward
, peaking
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trend, peaking
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 at 56
million
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dollars
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. Sales of adult fiction
was
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were
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 on top at the beginning of the year, at 45
million
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dollars
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. After a few fluctuations, it dropped dramatically to 30
million
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dollars
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 by 2006.
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, the sale of educational
books
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 ascended rapidly between 2002 and 2003, constituting 33
million
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dollars
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.
Then
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, it started to decline over the 2-year
periods
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period
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, accounting for 25
million
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dollars
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. Eventually, it culminated
with
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 development in 2006, representing 32
million
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dollars
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.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 75%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words books, million, dollars with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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