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Band 2

The diagramm shows the usage of solar box to heat air and water

The provided process
diagramm
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diagram
 illustrates how a solar panel is used to both heat
air
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 and
water
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.
Overall
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,a rectangular
box
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 which has an inlet and outlet pipe is
utilized
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utilised
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 to
make
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heat
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 the
air
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 and
water
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hot
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apply
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.
Water
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 pipes, which are not included in
air
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 heating, are installed
in
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for
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 heating
water
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 .
Initially
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,a transparent top is set into the rectangular
box
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.
Then
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 , so as to get hot
air
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,it is put in a sunny place.
After
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this
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,cool
air
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 is entered through the inlet .When the cool
air
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 is
the
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in the
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box
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,it is heated with sunray
which
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rays which
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goes
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go
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 through a transparent lid. Having been converted into hot
air
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 , it flows by the outlet
and
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, and
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 it is ready to be used in households. Turning to heating
water
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,
water
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 pipes are installed
into
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in
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 the rectangular
box
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.
This
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 is followed by letting the cold
water
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 in ,using the inlet . After
water
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 becomes hot in the
box
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 with the assistance of sunlight , it is run through the outlet, being ready to use.

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task
To raise task response, give a clear start by saying what the box does for both air and water, then list steps for air and then for water. Be precise.
coherence
For coherence, use clear order words: First, Then, After that, Finally. Put air steps in one paragraph and water steps in another.
grammar
Check grammar and spelling. Use simple sentences and correct phrases like 'The diagram shows' and 'It heats air and water'.
content
The writer shows both air and water use and the flow in order.
structure
There are clear time cues (Initially, Then) to show steps.
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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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