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Access to clean water is a fundamental human right. Some people believe that water should be provided free of charge to all households. To what extent do you agree or disagree

There is a widespread belief that access to clean
water
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 is a basic human right, and some people argue that every household should receive it free of charge. I partly agree with
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 view, as guaranteeing a minimum amount of clean
water
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 is essential, but offering unlimited
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 for free is neither practical nor sustainable. On the one hand, governments should ensure that all citizens can access enough clean
water
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 to meet their basic needs.
Water
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 is vital for drinking, cooking and maintaining hygiene, all of which are necessary for public health. In many low-income communities, even small
water
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 fees can prevent families from accessing safe
water
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. Providing a free basic supply would protect vulnerable groups and help reduce inequality.
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, offering unlimited
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 at no cost would create serious financial and environmental challenges.
Water
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 treatment and distribution systems require constant investment, and making all
water
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 free would place a heavy burden on national budgets.
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, when a resource is free, people tend to use it wastefully, which could lead to over-consumption and put pressure on natural
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 sources. In conclusion,
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 clean
water
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 should be guaranteed for everyone, giving households unlimited access for free is unrealistic. A balanced system that offers free basic
water
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 but charges for additional use is the most practical and fair solution.

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task response
Your view is clear. You give good reasons. Add one or two small facts or real life examples to back your point.
coherence and cohesion
The flow is easy to read, but tie each idea to the next with a small link.
structure
Keep a simple and steady style. Start each part with a clear idea and end with a note that links to the next part.
stance
Clear view and plan.
cohesion
Good use of linking words like on the one hand, on the other hand.
structure
Ends with a fair plan for water use.
Fully explain your ideas

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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