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Band 3

It is better for college students to live on campus than live at home with their parents. To what extent do you agree with this idea?

In
the
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recent times,
higher
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a higher
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 number of students prefer to stay inside
university
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the university
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/ college
campus
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 rather than staying with their parents at home . I completely agree with
this
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 development as it has several benefits, which
includes
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 convenience and growth as an individual. Living
in
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on
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the
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campus
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 is considerably more convenient than living at home.
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 is because
,
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 it offers easier
accessiblity
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accessibility
 to facilities on
campus
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.
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, a student who lives with his or her parents will have to commute regularly to take advantage of
such
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 university services.
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, A student residing
in
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the
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campus
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 can go to the college library
everyday
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every day
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 for studying, but a student living off-
campus
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 will have to travel.
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, staying close to the university or college promotes growth as an individual.
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 means that the students start living without their parents, which enables them to perform
every day
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 chores/ tasks individually.
As a result
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 , they inevitably acquire the necessary skills or abilities required to function as a responsible adult.
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,
An
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an
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 individual learns to cook and clean when they live alone. In conclusion, I am completely in
the
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support of the idea that students should
prioritize
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prioritise
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 living
on-
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on campus
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campus
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instead
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 of preferring to stay at home.
Due to
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 the merits of easier accessibility to resources on
campus
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, and
development
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the development
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 of necessary skills that
regulates
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regulate
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 self-growth.

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task response
Say your clear view at the start and end, and stick to it in the body.
coherence
Make the link from one idea to the next with simple words like and, but, so, also.
language
Check spell and grammar, especially words like accessiblity and everyday.
development
Add one more real example or fact to back your main ideas.
strength
The writer shows a clear position on the topic.
strength
Two reasons are given: convenience and growth.
strength
Examples are used to illustrate ideas.
Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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