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The table gives information about the water use in three sectors in six countries.

The table provides key information about
water
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 consumption in sex countries in three different fields of
use
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 in 2003
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, it is clear from the graph that all five countries, France,
USA
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, UK, China and Germany consume a significant amount of
water
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 in industrial
use
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,
while
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 Canada uses the second lowest persent of citizens using of
water
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 for industry.
According to
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 what is shown, people in France
use
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 the highest percentage of
water
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 in industrial
use
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, which was around 40%.
However
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, the
USA
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 and Germany spend approximately 30 per cent of their
water
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 on it. In fact, in terms of agricultural
use
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, France, the UK and Germany
use
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water
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 in negligible amounts. It was 20%, 10% and 15% respectively.
Therefore
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, the
USA
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, China and Canada
use
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water
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 in high percentages
,
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 to be specific, Canada uses 50% of their
water
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 in the agriculture sector. But the
USA
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 and China consume under 45% of
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water
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the water
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 proportion.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 71%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words water, use, usa with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • consumption patterns
  • agricultural sector
  • industrial water use
  • domestic water consumption
  • economic impact
  • environmental impact
  • disparities
  • efficiency
  • sustainability
  • government policies
  • managing
  • regulating
  • regions
  • factors influencing
  • comparative analysis
  • water resources
  • resource management
  • sector-specific use
  • data comparison
  • water scarcity
  • usage trends
  • conservation efforts
  • allocation of resources
  • water footprint
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