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Band 2.5

the garph below shows the percentage of reasons why people leave or stay in UK.

It is a pie
chat
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 that shows the percentage of the
reasons
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 why
people
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 leave or stay in
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UK
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the UK
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.
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Firstly
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Firstly,
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It
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it
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 is clear that most
reasons
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 that
people
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 stay in
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UK
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the UK
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is
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are
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quality
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the quality
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 of
life
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, which accounts for 40% of all
chart
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charts
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. The financial resources
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are
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 10% lower than the
quality
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 of
life
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.
By contrast
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 other three
reasons
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, weather, employment
and
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, and
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join
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joining
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 family and friends, make up the smallest percentage of
total
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the total
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 chart, which are 7% 13% and 10%. Another pie chart shows the
reasons
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 why
people
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 leave
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UK
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the UK
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, the largest
reason
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 is
also
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 the
quality
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 of
life
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 for 34%. Weather is
second
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the second
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reason
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 at 22%, and
follow
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follows
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 closely by financial resources at 20%.
While
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 employment represents 15%,
and join
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joining
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 family and friends is the smallest
reason
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 at only 9%
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Overall
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Overall,
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 the
quality
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 of
life
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 is the most common
reason
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 in both charts.
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However
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 the weather is
also
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 important
and
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, and
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 it impact
more
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apply
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on
people
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 leaving the
UK
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 than staying.

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content
Start with a short overall view of both charts before you list details.
content
Make sure facts are clear and correct. Use exact numbers for each category and keep the same terms for stay and leave.
structure
Link ideas with simple words to show compare and contrast, like 'in contrast' or 'also'.
language
Break long sentences into short ones and check grammar, especially subject and verb in plural forms.
content
You give many numbers from the charts, which helps show the data.
structure
You use order words like 'Firstly' and 'Overall' to show how the writing goes.
language
You describe what the two charts show in simple words.
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