The bar chart below shows the total number of minutes (in billions) of telephone calls in Australia, divided into three categories, from 2001- 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram illustrates the number of minutes (in billions) of
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calls in Australia, divided into three categories, between 2001 and 2008.
Overall
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, all tend to have a distinct trend during the given period. Local dominated in all
years
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and reached an impressive peak at 90
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telephone
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calls in 2005.
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National and International held the number 2 spot in all
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, reaching a peak of 61
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telephone
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calls in 2008.
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Mobiles held the
last
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place with a peak of 46
billion
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telephone
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calls in 2008.
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with, Local first 5
years
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increased steadily in 2005, but decayed in its rest
years
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, reaching 72
billion
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calls in 2008 and 2001.
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, National and International increased steadily in all
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, and their lowest
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calls were in 2001 with 38
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.
On the other hand
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, Mobiles slowly increased
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2001 to 2005,
then
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it
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significantly increased in its rest
years
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, and their lowest was 2
billion
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telephone
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calls in 2001. Unlike
the
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Local
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Local,
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national , and International
telephone
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calls, Mobile started with a low number.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words telephone, years, billion with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 4 times.
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