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The Diagrams Below Show Changes In Felixstone In The UK Between 1967 And 2001.

The map illustration demonstrates how Felixstone in
UK
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 has developed from 1967 to 2001.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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 the biggest change, comparing the years, is the
minimaization
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minimisation
 in buildings by the sea, as
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also
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well as
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 the change in the farmland. In 1967, Felixstone consisted of
golf
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a golf
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 course, shops on both
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side
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sides
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 of the high street and a farmland, on the top part of the town. As for the bottom part, it was packed with a fish market and marina on the right
side
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 of the pier, but on the left
side
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 of it with a hotel and cafe. Next to all of these buildings, on the
left
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left,
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 were some dunes. As for 2001, the things that
remaind
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remained
 the same
was
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were
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 the golf course, high street and cafe. The shops were only kept on one
side
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 of the road, but
devided
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divided
in to
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into
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 more smaller ones, and on the other
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side
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side,
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 some apartments were
constucted
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constructed
. For the hotel was added
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to a
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a
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the
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parking
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hotel
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, by the dunes, which were developed with some wind turbines inside. The land where
was
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apply
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the pier, marina and fish market
, was
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were, was
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devided
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divided
 into two beaches, on the left a public beach, but on the right a private beach. The
farmlande
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farmland
 was built
in to
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into
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 a hotel with two tennis courts and a swimming pool on the left.

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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words side with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 2 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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