The pie chart gives information on UAE government spending in 2000. The total budget was AED 315 billion. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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us information on
UAE
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the UAE
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government spending in 2000. The total
budget
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was AED 315
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dirhams
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in
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the pie
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its
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divided into 10 sections.
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pie chart shows us exactly where
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the money
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in a neat and
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way.
the
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major trend was the social security
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the next major trend was health and personal social services.
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2000, he total
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was AED 315
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billion dirhams
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dirhams
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billion
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. The most
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money went to social
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security
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was about AED 100
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dirhams
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which
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half of the total
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we have transportation
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was the lowest with 9
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dirhams
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from the
budget
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. The other major trend was health and personal social services
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costed
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cost
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53
billion
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dirhams
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from the whole yearly
goverment
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government
budget
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the others
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expenditure and debt
interest
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interest,
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was
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were
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the same amount of
dirhams
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 80%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words budget, billion, dirhams with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 3 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • budget
  • government
  • spending
  • billions
  • social development
  • infrastructure
  • defense
  • security
  • healthcare
  • education
  • investment
  • citizen
  • focus
  • priority
  • sector
  • emphasis
  • facilities
  • transport
  • well-being
  • future
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