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Writing Samples
Band 1

Nowadays governments are investing more in public transport such as buses and trains rather than in building new roads. Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

In recent years, governments have invested a lot in public transit systems, like buses and trains.
This
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 approach has made
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postive
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positive
 influence
in
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on
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 human society. I think its benefits are more substantial. First off, the public transport
protect
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protects
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 the environment and
ruduce
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reduces
 the cost of energy. By using transit
lie
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lies
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, the number of private vehicles
have
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has
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decline
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,
so
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apply
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that
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apply
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it
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 cuts the carbon emissions and air pollution.
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, public transport is more affordable for commuters. It eases the
financia
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financial
 burdens for the low-income groups.
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,
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 strategy
also
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 has limitations. Like
rual ares
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rural areas
, people mainly rely on the maintained
rodes
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roads
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.
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, the large public
tansit
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transit
 projects may strain the
goverment
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government
 budgets in the short
time
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.

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structure
Add a clear plan: start with a short view, then 2 or 3 main points, and finish with a brief end that restates your view.
structure
Make each paragraph have one main idea. Start with a clear sentence that tells the idea. Then add a short fact or example.
language
Use simple link words to join ideas: and, but, also, however, for example.
grammar
Be careful with spell and grammar. Fix small mistakes like 'protect' to 'protects', 'reduce' to 'reduces', and 'budget' to 'budgets'.
content
The writer shows the topic and gives a view on benefits of public transport.
structure
Link words like 'First off' and 'Moreover' show flow in ideas.
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To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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