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The line graphs below show the subscriptions to mobile and fixed phone lines in four different countries between 2005 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The line graphs compare the
number
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 of
subscriptions
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 to mobile
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phone
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phones
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 and fixed
telephone
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telephones
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 from 2005 to 2015 in four different countries, which are
Eritrea
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,
India
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,
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UK
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the UK
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, and Uruguay. The
number
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 provided is
in
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apply
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per hundred people.
Overall
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, the
number
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 of
both
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apply
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subscriptions
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 in
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UK
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the UK
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 and Paraguay
are
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is
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 significantly higher than
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Eritrea
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in Eritrea
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 and
India
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. In four countries, the fixed
phone
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 lines trends were relatively stable throughout the period,
whereas
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 the
amount
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number
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 of mobile
phone
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subcriptions
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subscriptions
were
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was
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 gradually increased. At the beginning of the period, mobile
phone
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subscriptions
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 in the
UK
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has
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had
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 the highest
number
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 at around 10.000 people, after that it gradually increased until
ended
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it ended
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 at around 12.0000.
While
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 in Uruguay, the figure started under 5000, before
surged
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it surged
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 sharply. reaching almost 15.000
at the end
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, becoming the highest figures.
Similar
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A similar
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 trend
also
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 happened in
India
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, which began at approximately 1000 and
then
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 soared to slightly under 10.000 in 2015.
Eritrea
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, like the
UK
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,
also
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shown
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showed
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a
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apply
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very small differences throughout the period with similar
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number
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numbers
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 from the start to the end at around 1000.
In contrast
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 with fixed telephone
subscriptions
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, all four countries
relatively
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are relatively
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 stable, with the
UK
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remain as
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remaining
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 the highest with 5000 in 2015.
At the end
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, Uruguay still
over
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had over
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 3000,
Eritrea
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 and
India
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 ended at
similar
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a similar
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 point at around 1000.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also, at the end".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 69%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, subscriptions, phone, eritrea, india, uk with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trends" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stable" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "gradually" was used 2 times.
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