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The chart shows requests for in formations at a tourist office in the United Kingdom from january to June. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparison where relevant. The chart shows requests for in formations at a tourist office in the United Kingdom from january to June. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparison where relevant.

The line chart elaborates
,
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apply
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about
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on
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 the data at a tourist office in the United Kingdom, between
first
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the first
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 six months
that is
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 from January to
June
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,
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. This
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this
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 information is in the form
in
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of
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person
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in-person
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, by letter/ email,
by
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or by
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 telephone.
Overall
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, the data obtained from the tourist office in the United
Kingdome
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Kingdom
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 by telephone was the highest in the beginning, which was overtaken by
in person
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in-person
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,
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however
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however,
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 letter/email remained lowest by the end. To commence, the information given by telephone in the month of January was the lowest of all, it was 400, which gradually
rosed
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rose
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 to double by two months,
moreover
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, by
June
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 it drastically gained more than 800.
On the other hand
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, by letter/ email has exactly
opposite
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the opposite
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 trend. Which was 800 in January,
subsequently
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, remained steady until
march
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March
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, unfortunately, it strongly dropped down below 400 by
June
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.
On the other hand
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,
for
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apply
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personal information was the highest among all
the
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at the
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 beginning. Though it had
fluctuating
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a fluctuating
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 graph, by
march
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March
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 it inclined to 1000
,
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;
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nonetheless
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, at
this
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 stage, it remained the top of all. Later 3 months
it
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apply
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showed moderate growth, touching 1600 in
June
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.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "on the other hand".
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 73%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words june with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "information" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 3 times.
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