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The bar chart below shows average UK salaries, by city. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart illustrates key information about the average yearly salary
acroos diffrent
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across different
 cities in the UK and the
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amount
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number
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 of individuals
,
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apply
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 who work there
,
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apply
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 in the
pervious
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previous
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 year.
the
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The
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 units are
meausred
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measured
 in Pounds sterling
currency
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apply
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.
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overall
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, it is
clearly
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 that London
the
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, the
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 Capital
city
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city,
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 has the highest average
salery
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salary
 and,
amount
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of
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number of
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 people,
where
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whereas
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 other cities have far
less
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fewer
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 people and
slightley
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slightly
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salery
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salary
. London dominated the Sample
having
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, having
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 over 50000
workers
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, even more than
other
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the other
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 six cities combined.
cambridge
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Cambridge
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have
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has
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 the second highest
salery
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salary
 average with around 30000,
suprisengly
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surprisingly
 it is the
least
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The least
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 populated city on the chart with 2180
workers
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 , followed by Birmingham with 2949
workers
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,
they
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which
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are
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is
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also
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 the lowest
earners
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earner
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 in
this
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 sample. Glasgow and Bristol
suprisengly
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surprisingly
 have almost the same
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amount
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number
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 of
workers
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, but different average yearly earnings by over 1000 pounds
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.
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 Manchester has the second highest
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amount
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number
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 of individuals after London
with
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, with
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 an approximate number of
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apply
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 4600
but
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, but
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 still earns less money than every city apart from Birmingham.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words amount, workers with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 4 times.
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