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Band 2

Some people think that it is better for a country's economy for people to spend money, while others believe that it would be better for people to save money. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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Introduction
Many individuals believe that it is the best way
to
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for
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 a country's
economy
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 is
consuming
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to consume
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,
while
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 others think that it would be better for citizens to save. I agree with the former viewpoint as spending money can
increase
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countries'
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a country's
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economy
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and
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, and
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 it will benefit the financial
.
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sector.
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Body paragraph 1
Unquestionably, the
economy
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 may
increase
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 when
saving
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savings
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 occupy a larger part
in
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of
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 people's
disposible
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disposable
 income. Both
individual
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the individual
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 and
nation
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the nation
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 may benefit from sufficient savings. For individuals
saving
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, saving
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 can maintain their confidence
while
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 there is
emergency
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an emergency
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happened
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happens
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.
Such
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 as losing jobs or illness. Banks will have enough
diposite
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deposit
 to lend to investors to invest
important
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in important
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 industries.
Body paragraph 2
However
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,
consuming
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consumption
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shows
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plays
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 an important role in economic growth. More spending means more
consuming
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consumption
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 by people,
that
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which
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 will cause an
increase
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 in total demand in the country. The GDP
which
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, which
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 is the total value a
contry
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country
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produces
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produced
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produced,
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 will
increase
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 dramatically.
For instance
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, America
which
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, which
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have
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has
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 the largest
economy
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 on the
planet
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planet,
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 is the country with the largest market
which
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, which
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 means more
consuming
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consumption
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.
Moreover
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, Taxes are paid
while
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 spending money.
Government
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The government
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 will invest
the
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apply
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basic in
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in basic
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 facilities with sufficient budget.
Conclusion
Personally speaking, saving may cause
economics
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economic
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groth
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growth
, increasing
demand
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the demand
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 that people can spend should be the main aim

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structure
Plan your essay. Start with a simple intro that restates the task, then two body parts for each view, and end with your own view.
content
Make your main ideas clear. Say how saving and spending do good or harm. Add simple facts or small examples to back them.
language
Use good grammar and fix common spell errors. Check words like disposable, economy, country, growth.
coherence
Use linking words to join ideas. Words like also, but, in addition, then help flow.
style
Keep to a short and simple style. Do not repeat the same phrases. Use different simple words.
stance
The writer has a clear view on the topic.
content
The essay tries to discuss both sides of the issue.
example
An example is used to back a point.
Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Disposable income
  • Consumer expenditure
  • Economic growth
  • Financial security
  • Standard of living
  • Economic downturn
  • Savings rate
  • Investment
  • Infrastructure
  • Innovation
  • Market demand
  • Economic stability
  • Interest rates
  • Macroeconomics
  • Sustainable growth
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