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Some people believe that it is good to share as much as possible in scientific research, business, and the academic world. Others believe that some information is too important or valuable to be shared freely. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

In recent years, there
have
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 been an alarming rate of advancement in technology, owing to the
signigficant
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significant
 increase in discovery in multiple
cruical
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critical
 sectors.
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,
this
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 raises concerns from many citizens on how multiple established companies or agencies refuse to publicly announce their
scientifc
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scientific
 encounters, as they firmly argue that it would bring benefits from distributing valuable
informations
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information
 as much as possible. From my perspective, I rigidly
affirms
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affirm
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 that it is not finest to disclose the field-diagnosis to the maximum extent
due to
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may
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many
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 consequences in
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stagnation
 in the rate of research in the future. On one hand,
community
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communities
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 that
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strongly desire for those contemporary data to be
mutualized
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made available
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, state that if
public
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the public
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acknowldges
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acknowledges
 the ongoing activities, those who are fascinated by the current
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research
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 topic
,
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 may be attracted.
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,
could
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it could
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 lead to
an
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a
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noticebly
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noticeable
rises
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rise
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 in
size
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the size
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 of
workforce
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the workforce
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, which could
signigciantly
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significantly
 speed up the process. Resulting in a
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surge
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 of outputs, which will
benefits
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benefit
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 society as a whole.
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, those who are opposing
this
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 idea
,
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 hold the
arguments
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argument
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 that by leaking privacy materials that are highly sensitive,
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it could
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 lead to some people
agressively
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aggressively
feel
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feeling
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 conflicted.
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, they could potentially disrupt the
researchs
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research
 that
are
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is
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 still in the process.
This
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 could vitally
leads
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lead
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 to a slowdown in discovery processes.
In addition
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,
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this
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these
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sciencetific
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scientific
 contexts could potentially be inaccurate and misleading, which can
further
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raises
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raise
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 safety issues.
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,
according to
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 UNESCO, more than a hundred
lives
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people
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 had
passed away
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died
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 in 2019,
from convincing
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based on the claim
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 that consuming ten lemons daily could cure
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a viruse
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viruse
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virus
. In conclusion, I firmly believe that it is not
ideals
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ideal
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 to disclose crucial findings as much as practically possible, but only
minority
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a minority
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of diagnosis
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diagnosis
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diagnoses
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 that could be publicly
annoucned
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announced
.
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,
by
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apply
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delegating permission for citizens to know about certain virus facts
,
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apply
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 could
further
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increases
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increase
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more
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the use of
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 emerging biological technologies to cure
the
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diseases.

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task
Plan your essay. Say what you will talk about and your view at start.
cohesion
Make link words clear. Use first, then, also, but to join ideas.
task
Give one clear example that fits the point.
style
Use plain and small words. Do not use long hard words.
structure
Good plan and clear view.
content
You show both sides and your own view.
Fully explain your ideas

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • share
  • open
  • data
  • science
  • study
  • health
  • progress
  • trust
  • learn
  • help
  • more
  • less
  • time
  • cost
  • risk
  • harm
  • safe
  • danger
  • secret
  • right
  • law
  • rule
  • policy
  • idea
  • fact
  • care
  • view
  • balance
  • license
  • limit
  • protect
  • control
  • access
  • people
  • world
  • business
  • money
  • privacy
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