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The chart below shows three different crimes and the number of cases committed in 1970 and2005 in England and Wales. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The line
chat
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 compares changes in
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number
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the number
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 of cases
figures
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apply
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for different kinds of crimes in England and Wales from 1970 to 2005.
Overall
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, three
type
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types
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 of
crimes trend
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crime trends
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were
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apply
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rose over the period.The main
different
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difference
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 is
after
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that after
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 1995,
expect
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except for
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 Street robbery
both
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, both
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 Car theft and House
burgling were
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burglary
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decrease
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decreased
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. The most
number
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 of cases in three different
is Car
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categories are car
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 theft. In the first year, Car
theft
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thefts
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number
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apply
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was about 0.4
million
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, which
it
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apply
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suddenly
growth
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grew
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of
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to
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 1.6
million
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 in 1995. After
that
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that,
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 it
continuously
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has been continuously
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 declining. The house
burgling
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burglary rate
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 rose dramatically from around 0.4
million
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 to approximately 1
million
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. There were small fluctuations until 2000, which was followed by a dramatic decrease to around 0.6
million
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 between 1980 to 2000. The figure for Street robbery was
initially
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 around 0.1
million
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. The
number
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remain
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remained
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stabled
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stable
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,
it reached
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reaching
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 approximately 0.2
million
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 between 1970 and 1995.
However
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, steady gain after
year
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the year
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 1995.

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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "dramatically" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • trend
  • fluctuation
  • peak
  • trough
  • rate
  • significant
  • incidence
  • decline
  • increase
  • statistics
  • data
  • crime rate
  • comparison
  • period
  • variations
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