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Some university students want to learn about other subjects in addition to their main subjects. Others believe it is more important to give all their time and attention to studying for a qualification. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

A growing debate
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 college and university students is “Should I study a second major?”
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 The answer to that question is a yes or no. In
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 how the two groups look at the problem,
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 state my personal opinion on the matter. The first group, whose answer to our question is a resounding "yes", believes that having more than
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 skill or craftsmanship is more important than being
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-dimensional in something.
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, a programmer who can work on both front-end and back-end is more resourceful and valuable to a company
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than a full-stack back-end developer.
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, the first group believes that taking more than
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 subject in university can create more opportunities for an individual.
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, people who answer "no" are more traditional. They firmly stand on following a set curriculum for their higher education.
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, they believe that people with
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 and management.
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, they refer to the first group as "Jack of all trades , master of none".
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, they claim an individual can reach higher places in our community. In conclusion, both views have great points, advantages , and drawbacks. I personally agree that by selecting
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 you can reach higher places.
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 thing, whether it is an extra subject, a cooking recipe, a sport or any other thing. Because it will be proven useful in your future.

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task response
State your view clearly in one idea in each paragraph and keep one main point per paragraph.
coherence
Use clear topic sentences to start each paragraph.
content
Add more real examples to back up your points.
language
Use simple words and short sentences; avoid long phrases.
language
Watch grammar and punctuation so sentences are easy to read.
structure
You show both sides of the issue and give a personal view.
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There is a clear end that gives your opinion.
coherence
Link words like On the other hand and In conclusion help flow.
Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Broaden
  • Perspectives
  • Specialize
  • Critical thinking
  • Problem-solving skills
  • Career success
  • Interdisciplinary connections
  • Structured path
  • Clear goals
  • Creativity
  • Innovation
  • Academic credibility
  • Recognition
  • Balance
  • Exploring
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