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Writing Samples
Band 5

An English speaking friend would like to visit your town/city and has written to you to ask for some advice. Write a letter to this friend. In your letter. Say when the best time to visit your town/city is tell your friend what the most interesting places are Suggest where they can find cheap accommodation.

Dear Tom, I hope
this
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 letter finds you in good health and
spirit
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spirits
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. I'm writing
this
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 letter to shed
lights
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light
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 on some beautiful places in my hometown where you can visit, and make the trip more memorable. I'd suggest you
to
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apply
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come during
mid of August
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mid-August
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, when
the
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apply
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spring
start
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starts
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. The weather will be perfect as it will not be too hot or
cold
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too cold
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.
Thus
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,
making
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it
appropriate
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is appropriate
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 to catch up
all
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on all
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 the elegant places in my city.
First,
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we'd cover the famous forts
,
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 and temples, which were built
at
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in
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16th
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the 16th
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 century.
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This
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These
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 places actually
reflects
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reflect
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 the rich cultural heritage of our city .
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, a traditional festival market will
occurs
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occur
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 during the beginning of
spring
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the spring
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 season, where we can discover local handmade crafts,and
emboddiery
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embroidery
 with
fusion
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a fusion
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 of international touch. I'd prefer you to look nearby at the
center
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centre
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 of the
city
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city,
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 where you can find lots of guest
house
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houses
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 which are actually famous for backpackers, and
makes
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make
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 it suitable because it is
affortable
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affordable
. On top of that, I work in
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a hilton
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hilton
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Hilton
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 hotel where I can give you my employee concession
about
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for
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the
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a
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stay
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one-week stay
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 for one week. So you don't have
worry
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to worry
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 about
you're
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your
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 stay since we
got
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have
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 lots of options. I'm
exciting
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excited
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 to see you soon, and do get back to me whenever you are free. Best regards, Jack

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task response
Your letter answers all three tasks, but some parts are not clear or well explained.
task response
Fix fact mistakes and use easy, clear facts. For example, the time of year and season should be correct.
coherence
Make the flow smooth. Use a new paragraph for each main idea: time to visit, places to see, and where to stay.
coherence
Use simple link words like first, next, also, and finally to show order.
grammar
Check the spelling and grammar a bit more to be easy to read.
lexical
Be specific about cheap places or area near the city center.
tone
Friendly tone and warm closing.
content
You cover all the task parts.
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