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the chart gives data on the amount of food and goods which were purchased in supermarkets in 3 european countries in 1998 and 2008

the
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 chart gives data on the amount of food and goods which were purchased in supermarkets in 3
european
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European
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 countries in 1998 and 2008.
food
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Food
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 bought in supermarkets around 10 % in 1998
and
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 it
was
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sharply increased
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by
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35%
country
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 A in 2008.
in
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In
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 1998, it was 23% and it
was
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slightly
grow
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grew
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27
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% in 2008 in
country
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 B.
in
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In
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 1998, it was 7% and it was
the
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level
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same level
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of
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in 2008 in
country
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 C.
goods
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Goods
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bought in supermarkets around 4% in 1998
and
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, and
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 they
were
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rapidly increased
38
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by 38
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% in 2008 in
country
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 A. They were
the
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at the
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 level of 25 % over 10 years in
country
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 B. In
country
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C
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they were 1 % in 1998
and
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 they were 14% in 2008.
in
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overall
Linking Words
, in
2008
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2008,
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 both countries they were
increase
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Linking Words
while
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, while
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 in 1998
decrease
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 100%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words country with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "gives" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "data" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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