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The graph below gives information about the number of tourists who visited five different countries between 1995 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph illustrates how many
visitors
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had
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apply
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visited five different countries from 1995
until
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to
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 2010.
Overall
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,
The
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the
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 USA
the
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is the
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 largest country
who
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that
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 had many
visitors
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, and France was jumping between 1995 and 2000.
While
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 Malaysia was steady rise. Brazil and Egypt showed weak growth until the end of
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period
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the period
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.
USA
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The USA
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 was the largest country
who
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that
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 had many
visitors
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on
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over
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 the whole
period
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,
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.
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USA
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The USA
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 showed
steady
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a steady
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 increase from 70
million
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visitors
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 between 1995 and 2005
and
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, and
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 decline
in
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at
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end
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the end
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 of
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period
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the period
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 slightly
went
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going
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 down from 90
million
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visitors
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 to around 87
million
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visitors
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. France jumped sharply from 30
million
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visitors
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 between 1995
until
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and
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 2010. Malaysia
was
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saw
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an increased
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increased
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increase
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slightly
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apply
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from 20
million
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visitors
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 to about 50
million
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visitors
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. Brazil and Egypt were increasing weakly in the whole
period
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 from 1995 until 2010.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words visitors, period, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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