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Writing Samples
Band 1

Students in university should be specialized in one subject rather than to develop a wider range of knowledge in many different subjects. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

The data given shows export earnings of 5 different products between 2015 and 2016. Information about percentile changes in value in the given years
are
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is
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 shown in the table.
Overall
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, exports increased except for gems and jewellery.
To begin
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 with,
while
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 textiles had the lowest earnings of 25
billion
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 dollars in 2015. It
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however
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, however
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, became the highest
increased
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increase
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 of them all in 2016 with 15.24%. Coming to agricultural products,
it
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there
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had
Verb problem
were
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less
Fix the agreement mistake
fewer
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 exports of them with just
0.81
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a 0.81
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% increase. Starting at just above 30
billion
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 to 31
billion
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 dollars. Engineered goods and petroleum were the highest in both years. The former saw about
8.6
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an 8.6
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 % increase in 2016
and
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 the
later
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latter
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 with
aproximately
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approximately
 3%.
While
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 other products increased their exports, gems and jewellery decreased
with
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by
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 5.18%. Beginning at around 43
billion
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 to 40
billion
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.

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structure
Add a clear intro and a short ending.
overview
Give one big view at the start and then tell the facts in order.
accuracy
Be sure the facts you use are right and match the data in the chart.
coherence
Use simple links to move from one idea to the next.
overview
The text points to a main trend.
content
Some good name of items is used, like textiles and gems.
Fully explain your ideas

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • specialized
  • subject
  • knowledge
  • range
  • career
  • opportunities
  • competitive
  • skills
  • academic
  • performance
  • adaptable
  • problem solvers
  • connections
  • fields
  • creativity
  • innovation
  • exposure
  • perspective
  • students
  • understand
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