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Band 4.5

Acess to clean water is a basic human right. therefore every home should have a water supply that is provided free of charge. Do you agree or dis agree?

Water
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 is
essential
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an essential
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 element in human life.
without
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Without
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 a clean source of
water
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,
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people
cant
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can't
 live
normal
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normally
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 and
healthy
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healthily
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. I agree that each household should have a clean
acess
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access
of
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to
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water
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 but at
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a resonable
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resonable
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reasonable
 price to let the entire population benefit from
this
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 service and at the same time encourage
water
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rationalizing
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rationalising
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 among
population
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the population
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. As i mentioned each individual should have easy afordable
water
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 supply because if government make
this
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 service overprice
then
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 people with low income may not be able to pay for
this
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,
as a result
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 they may use unhygenic or contaminated
water
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 source, which in turn lead to spread of infection and disease,
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 a study made in some low economic level country including India, Bangladish and Bakistan showed that at 2011 there was a wide spread of Hepatitis A virus through contaminated
water
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 use which cause severe life threatining symptoms like dihrea which make cause dihydration and death. That was because
large
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a large
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 part of
population
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the population
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dosent
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doesn't
 have
clean
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a clean
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water
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 supply.
On the other hand
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, if the government offer
this
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 facility
with
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at
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affordable
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an affordable
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 price
instead
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 of letting it free of charge,
this
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encourge
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encourages
 saving
water
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 and
teach
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teaches
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 the community that it is
valuble
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valuable
 and they
shouldnt
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shouldn't
 waste
water
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 and avoid unnecessary use.
For
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example
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example,
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 in my country
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water
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, water
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 supply is not free of charge, we pay
bill
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a bill
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 every month
and
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, and
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 there are penalties for waste of
water
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,
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.
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 I remember my father
alwasys
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always
tell
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told
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 the housekeeper to sweep the front yard
instead
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 of washing it
as
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, as
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this
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will
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would
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need
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require
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excess
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excessive
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water
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 consumption and might get
ticket
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a ticket
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 if
water
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 drained out of the front door into the street.
another
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Another
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 example is that
i
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I
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 always tell my kid how important
is
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water is
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water
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 and we have to get used to good habits like turning off the
fucet
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faucet
 during brushing and not spending
long
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a long
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 time in the shower In
conclusion
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conclusion,
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water
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 is
vital
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a vital
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elment
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element
 in our daily life and a basic right for each individual to have
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affordable
afordable
Punctuation problem
afordable,
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 clean
water
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acess
Correct your spelling
access

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task response
Make your view clear in the first sentence of the essay and keep it the same throughout. Do not drift from your main point.
coherence
Use one or two good ideas in each paragraph and show how they support your view. Use a simple order: intro, why, example, and conclusion.
coherence
Start each paragraph with a short, clear sentence (topic sentence) that tells the idea.
language use
Check spell and word form so the meaning is easy to see.
coherence
Use simple linking words like 'for example', 'also', 'therefore', to connect ideas.
position
The writer shows a clear view that water should be affordable, not free.
examples
Some real life examples are given to explain points.
content
The essay talks about why water access matters for health.
Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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