The charts below show the number of Japanese tourists travelling abroad between 1985 and 1995 and Australia’s share of the Japanese tourist market. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below.

The pictures below illustrate the number of Japanese tourists travelling abroad from 1985 to 1995 and
also
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Australia's portion of the Japanese visitors market.
Overall
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, the first picture displays a form of a bar chart that shows the number travelling abroad written in millions. The second picture displays a form of line graph that shows the percentage of tourists from Japan coming to Australia. In the first graph,
it is clear that
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in 1985, more than 5 million people travelled outside of Japan. After that, every following year the number of travellers increased steadily till 1990. In the next years it the amount has decreased slightly. In the following years, it has risen routinely,
according to
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the
last
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collected data. In the second graph,
in contrast
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, in 1985, 2 per cent of Japanese citizens visited Australia.
Moreover
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, it has been increasing steadily till 1988, when it dropped moderately. After that year, it increased routinely till 1993, when it
also
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dropped slightly,
according to
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the data.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "displays" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • decade
  • fluctuation
  • consistent growth
  • market share
  • peak
  • period
  • significant
  • trend
  • indicate
  • tourism industry
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