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Band 4

Topic 3 PART 1 Your city library is closing for renovation for three months. 1 Write a short message to your classmate about how you feel and what you will do instead. (about 50 words)

Dear Adiljon, Did you see
tha
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the
 latest information
of
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about
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library
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the library
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 from the
Telegramm
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Telegram
 Channel
.
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As
,
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 I listen
centre
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central
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libary
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library
 of the city is clothing for renovantion for a long time. I was
suprised
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surprised
 when I heard
this
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was
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 various books there
and
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This
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 was convenient to read books.
Furthemore
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Furthermore
, I need to find another one. If you help to find it
me
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, I will be joyful from your help. I look forward to your response. Best wishes, Maqsud

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grammar
Spelling and word form need to be checked. Many common words are not written correctly, which makes the idea hard to read.
organization
Use simple and clear sentence structure. Start with a greeting, then say how you feel, then say what you will do, and finish with a short close.
grammar
Check word order and places of words. For example, 'Did you see the latest information about the library in the city Telegram channel?'
punctuation
Use capital letters and full stops regularly. This helps to show clear ideas.
vocabulary
Keep to one idea per sentence and use small, clear words. This helps the reader to follow you.
content
The topic is clear: the writer tells of a library closing and what to do.
style
There is a friendly tone and a polite closing.
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To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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