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Part2 is better to rent an apartment or buy a house

There has always been a hot debate over renting an apartment or buying a
house
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 some say that renting is better because it is cheaper and more flexible,others think that renting is better as it gives
peaceful
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.I personally support the latter position
due to
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 some reasons in the coming bodies. On the one hand,it can be seen that renting is more flexible for people.For
people
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instance,if a person needs. To change their job,they can
more
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move
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 to another place easily without many problems.
On the other hand
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,critics might claim the idea that buying a
house
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 is a good long-term choice
taking
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 one shining example,a family that owns a
house
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 does not worry about rent increases.
if
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 they take care of the
house
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,it can even become more valuable. Personally,I support the idea that buying a
house
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 is better
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 addition it
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 people a strong feeling of security.
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,if someone owns a home,they could live there for many years without fear of
leaving out
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 the
house
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. In conclusion,
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 some side offers useful benefits,the advantages of my
view point
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 are more convincing.Making the right choice could help
person
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a person
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 have a more comfortable and stable life
overall
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content
In the intro, state your clear view (buying a house) and plan what you will discuss.
structure
Each paragraph should have one main idea. Start with a topic sentence and end with a short wrap-up.
content
Provide more details and examples for each point. Show why it is true for families or people.
language
Keep grammar simple but correct. Use correct verb form and punctuation.
structure
Use linking words to show contrast and order, e.g., 'also', 'however', 'in addition'
idea
The essay tries to discuss both sides and shows a personal view.
structure
There is some linking of ideas with phrases like 'on the one hand' and 'on the other hand'.
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To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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