Essay topics: Some people think that good health is a basic human need, so the medical service should not be run by profit-making companies. Do you think the disadvantages of private health care outweigh the advantages?

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I don't think so because of all
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work
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hard to
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apply
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humans
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safe
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they have risen to do that
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public health
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a lot of problems
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of them is safety
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it takes a long time
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the materials are not very good and not
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task
Give a clear yes or no and add one or two main reasons.
structure
Make one idea per paragraph and use small links to join ideas.
language
Use easy words and fix big mistakes in grammar.
content
The writer shows a clear view on the topic.
coherence
There is an effort to link ideas.
Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Universal healthcare
  • Profit-driven healthcare
  • Patient welfare
  • Social inequality
  • Vulnerable populations
  • Public welfare
  • Economic status
  • Revenue generation
  • Healthcare solutions
  • Advanced technology
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