Many people have a close relationship with their pets. These people treat their birds, cats, or other animals as members of their family. In your opinion, are such relationships good? Why or why not?

In my
opinion
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I think
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it's
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good because animals make the person feel better and happy when they see them and play with them
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make
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food for them
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. Also
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also
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also,
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some people
secar
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scared
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around
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animal
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animals
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maybe
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they have a bad memory with it
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just I don't
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but
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in my
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I love animals

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task
Task response: State a clear view and give reasons. Include a small example.
coherence
Coherence: Use short, clear sentences. End each sentence with a full stop. Use linking words like and, also, because, but to join ideas.
language
Language: Use common words. Check spellings and grammar. Do not mix tenses.
content
The topic is about care for animals and how it can help people.
style
Uses simple words which can be easy to read.
Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general
Topic Vocabulary:
  • pet
  • animal
  • family
  • home
  • love
  • bond
  • friend
  • care
  • children
  • responsibility
  • routine
  • money
  • time
  • loss
  • death
  • happiness
  • health
  • stress
  • mood
  • loneliness
  • support
  • balance
  • rules
  • welfare
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