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Writing Samples
Band 4

Many things at home which were done by hand are now done by machines. What problems are caused by this phenomenon? What can be done to tackle those problems?

Many things in our house and our life changed because of technology
for example
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 the machines ar do all things with it even though we can do it with hand
moreover
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this
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 can do allot of problems like rconomic issues
such
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 as unemployment or underemployment for individuals who previously performed these tasks by hand and
also
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 make the person fell like they are lazy person
however
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 we can't forget that it makes our life easier and more enjoyable It just depends
how
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on how
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 we use it

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task response
Give the full answer. Add two or three clear points on the problems and a few steps to fix them.
content
The idea is clear: tech changes life and can hurt jobs; it also makes life easier.
cohesion
There are some linking words like 'also' and 'but'.
balance
The writer shows some care in discussing both sides.
Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Dependency
  • Self-sufficiency
  • Energy consumption
  • Unemployment
  • Underemployment
  • Physical activity
  • Over-reliance
  • Social interactions
  • Collectively
  • Opportunities for socializing
  • Decreased physical exertion
  • Manual tasks
  • Automation
  • Technological advancement
  • Lifestyle changes
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