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In many countries today, the number of plants and animals are declining. Why is it happening? What can be done to solve this situation? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your experience.

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recent years, a lot of countries
are
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have been
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 suffering from the scarcity of
the
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plants
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 and
animals
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, and the number of
the
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trees
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and
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apply
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are
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is
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 decreasing
by
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over
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the
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time. In
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essay
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 I will discuss the reasons behind
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 phenomenon before reaching the conclusion. Many nations believe that
the
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plants
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 and
animals
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 are essential for
the
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human
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humans
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 and
environment
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the environment
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,
dispit
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despite
 that many
people
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 are cutting the
trees
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 for many causes.
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, individuals are cutting the
trees
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 on the street's sides to expand the roads.
Other
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Others
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 have cut the
trees
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 for
industerial
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industrial
 purposes,
such
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 as
producting
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producing
papers
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paper
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 from the wood.
People
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 who kill the pets "dogs, cats and rats" are causing
environment's
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the environment's
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 unbalancing
which
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, which
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 leads to
decreasing
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a decrease
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on
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in
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animals's
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animals
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 numbers.
On the other hand
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, there are many actions
must
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that must
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 be applied to
over come
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overcome
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this
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 behaviour from
individals
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individuals
 and
governments
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. Public awareness by the
governments
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 will have
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a senificant
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senificant empact
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significant impact
 to save the
trees
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 and
anilmals
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animals
.
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, the
governments
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 can apply penalties for those who kill any animal or cut any tree.
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people
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People
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 must use the free spaces in their gardens to increase the
plants
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 and
trees
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.
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, they can adopt some of the pets
like
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, like
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 birds and turtles and teach
this
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 behaviour to their children.
Last
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 but not least,
governments
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 must encourage
the
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people
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for planting
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to plant
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 by
offer
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offering
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 some prizes and gifts
for
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to
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whom
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those who
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increasing
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increase
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 the number of
plants
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 in their
neighborhoods
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neighbourhoods
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 and
for
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to
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 anyone
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who save
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save
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saves
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 a homeless animal.
To sum up
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,
cansciously
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consciously
 we can say that saving and increasing the
trees
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 and
animals
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 is very important for both
human
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humans
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 and
environment
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the environment
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.
Moreover
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, the
responsubilty
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responsibility
 is shared between the
individulas
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individuals
 and
governments
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.

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coherence
Plan the work. Start with a short intro, then one paragraph on each cause, then a paragraph on what to do. End with a short finish. This keeps a clear path.
task response
Give more strong reasons and show how each fix will help. Add one real life example for each idea to show you know the issue.
grammar
Check the basic gram. Use 'are' with 'plants and animals' and 'trees'. Fix spell errors like 'despite', 'industrial', 'balance'.
lexical
Use simple yet clear word. Find common words to say the same point. For example: 'protect plants', 'save animals', 'plant more trees'.
content
You write about both causes and ways to help.
content
You give some real examples like roads and paper.
structure
You try to use linking words.
Fully explain your ideas

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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