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The use of social media is replacing face-to-face interaction among many people in society. Do you think the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

Many
people
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 in society are
began
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 to
replacing
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replace
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 face-to-face interactions
to
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with
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 social
media
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. There might be both advantages and disadvantages
using
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to using
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 social
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but
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, but
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 I believe it has more benefits. Social
media
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 is a representative of modern
tecnology
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technology
 in
term
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terms
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 of
communicate
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communicating
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 with other
people
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.
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, it
have
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has
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 many advantages
on
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in
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 using social
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, many
people
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 can communicate with their relatives, friends, and their
co-worker
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co-workers
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 no matter how long the distance between them. Another example is it can be helping
people
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 with their work,
such
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 as online
bussineses
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businesses
,
work
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working
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 from home and being a space to place the advertisement.
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, social
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have
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reconnect
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reconnected
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 many
long lost
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 families, old friends
and
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, and
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 even
helping
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people
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saw
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find
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 their lost
pet
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.
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, it has been shown that social
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have
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has
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 many
function
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functions
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 in
humans
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apply
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modern
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human civilization
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civilization
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.
However
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,
on the other hand
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, the disadvantages of having
a
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apply
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social
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also
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cannot be ignored.
For instance
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, nowadays human ability to
socialize
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socialise
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 with other
people
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have
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has
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 been decreased
due to
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over exploiting
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overexploiting
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sicial
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social
media
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 in everyday life. Many
people
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 are
close
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closing
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 themselves
to
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off to
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 the world and
only
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are only
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 active on social
media
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 all day without ever seeing
a
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the
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 sunlight.
According to
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BBC
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the BBC
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, almost 70
percent
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per cent
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 of young generations
are
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already have an addiction towards
over using
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overusing
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 social
media
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,
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this
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which
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 can lead to
create
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creating
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a
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apply
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more
soliter
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solitary
 communities rather than social communities. In conclusion, I believe that social
media
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 has a huge impact towards
humans
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human
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civilazation
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civilisation
.
This
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 can be seen by the economic boom
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that is
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caused by social
media
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structure
Make a clear plan. Start with a short intro, then one paragraph for the good side, one paragraph for the bad side, and a short end.
grammar
Use simple and common words. Check word form and fix errors.
coherence
Link ideas with calm words, like also, but, however, for example.
task
Give real and clear examples that fit the task.
task
Be sure your claim answers the question: do the good parts beat the bad?
content
You give your view and keep it.
content
You show many ideas on how social media can help work and family.
structure
There is a clear end that repeats your view.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • face-to-face interaction
  • geographical barriers
  • global community
  • cultural diversity
  • economic opportunities
  • superficial interactions
  • mental health impact
  • loneliness
  • depression
  • interpersonal relationships
  • real world
  • spread of misinformation
  • echo chambers
  • societal polarization
  • informed citizenship
  • constant connectivity
  • maintain relationships
  • fast and efficient
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