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The graph below shows the number of tourist using a particular Caribbean island passing 2010 and 2017

The given line graph compares the
number
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 of tourists that visit a specific
island
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on carribean
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in the Caribbean
 over the years 2010 to 2017
It is clear that
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 the
number
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 of visitors rose drastically over these years
, the
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. The
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island
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 saw the maximum amount of tourists in 2017 In
year
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the year
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 2010
the
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The
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 total
number
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 of visitors who travelled to the
island
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 was 1
million
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 75% of them decided to stay on
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island
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the island
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while
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 only 25%
only
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apply
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preferred to stay on
cruise
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 ships. The following year, total figures
seen
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saw
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 a rise
approximately
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of approximately
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 0.25
million
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,
although
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 the
number
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 of people who preferred to stay on the
island
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 remained unchanged, about 0.5
million
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 people got interested in staying on
cruise
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 ships
through
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Through
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this
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 given
period
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period,
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 the
island
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 saw a peak amount of visitors in 2017, about 3.5
million
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overall
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 Regardless of the decline, the figures for tourists who stayed on
cruise
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 ships experienced only a
continous
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continuous
 growth throughout the following years
reaching
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, reaching
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it's
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its
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 peak of 2
million
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 in 2017. Staying on the
island
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 had been
more
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the more
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 preferred option
which
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, which
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 continued to be almost stable at 1.5
million
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, when it was surpassed by the
figures
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number of people
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 who decided to stay on
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cruise
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a cruise
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 ship in 2016

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Basic structure: Use less body paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, island, million, cruise with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stay" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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