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When visiting foreign countries, some people think it is advantageous to learn their cultures and traditions. How do you think people can learn other cultures and traditions? Why some people are interested in learning those traditions and cultures while others not?

Some
people
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 argue that it is not necessary to learn about other
county’s
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countries’
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cultures
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 and
traditions
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 before
traveling
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travelling
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.
However
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, I strongly believe that it is beneficial for
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travellers
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 to enjoy their trip. Since technology has improved,
people
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 can easily learn about any foreign
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countries
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country
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. Through social media platforms, individuals can understand other
cultures
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 and
traditions
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 before
traveling
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travelling
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.
Furthermore
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, they can ask other
people
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 in order to gain knowledge about
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 nation.
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, my sister always watches videos about any country’s
traditions
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 before visiting it and
ask
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 her followers on Instagram in order to learn from their experiences and avoid any problems.
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, advertising plays a key role in
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 regard, which helps
public
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the public
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 understand
traditions
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 and culture better. Some
travelers
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travellers
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 are interested in learning
other
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about other
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cultures
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 and
traditions
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 before
traveling
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 for several reasons. It
is
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first supports them to save time and
efforts
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effort
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.
In other words
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, searching
about
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for
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 their prices of
foods
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food
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,
transports
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transport
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, and accommodation
help
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helps
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 them
to
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safe
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save
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 time when they
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Second,
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avoid any social issues
such
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 as crimes and thefts.
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, my sister went to China
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 she faced a challenge with their currency
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 she could not count the money correctly.
Additionally
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, some
countries
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has
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same
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the same
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 words
but
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 the meaning is different
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therefore
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,
people
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 should learn about
country’s
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a country’s
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 language.
This
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 will help them to
easy
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 communicate with others.
Gain
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 knowledge about other
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countries
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countries'
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traditions
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 and
cultures
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 can support
people
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 in a much better way. In conclusion, learning about foreign
countries
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 through the media and advertising is a great way to enjoy
traveling
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travelling
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 and
safe
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save
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 more time
overall
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.
Thus
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, individuals should know more about
country’s
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the country’s
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cultures
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 and
traditions
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 to avoid problems and
contact easily
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easily contact
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with
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apply
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the local
people
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.

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task response
Answer both parts of the question: why some people may not want to learn about other cultures, and why learning helps.
grammar
Use short, clear sentences. Split long ideas into small parts to avoid errors.
coherence
Use clear topic sentences and simple linking words to connect ideas across paragraphs.
strength
The view that learning about culture helps travel is clear.
strength
Real example from a family member shows how people learn before a trip.
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