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Band 4.5

The graph below shows UK air pollutants, measured in million tonnes, from three different sources between 1990 and 2005. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The line chart
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 key information about the United Kingdom air pollutants
by
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 three
various
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items, from 1990 to 2005. The units are measured in
million
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 tonnes.
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, it is clear from the graph that
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transportation was the main source of noxious gases over the period.
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 the households generated the lowest amount. In terms of transport, it started at about 6.5
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 tonnes of carbon dioxide in 1990,
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show
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 a sharp decline to 4
million
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 in 1999.
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, with
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increased
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of
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 consciousness about
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the harmfulness
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 of
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 number plunged to nearly 3
million
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 by the end of the period.
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, the families there have a minimum share
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 their awareness
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 the drawbacks of
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 issue.
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,
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 appeared about 1
million
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 during the term.
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, the factories have the same tendency
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previous
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 sector,
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the strict
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 policies
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implemented by the politicians. The total amount of
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 gases
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it shown
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 fluctuating rates
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 it began at slightly under 6
million
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, and
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next
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,
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 it reached
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2
million
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 by the end of the
top
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.
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, it generally reflects that the education of the individual has improved over the years.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "due to".
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 5 times.
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