The graph below shows the percentage of people visiting a museum at least once a year between 1980 and 2010.

The given line graph illustrates the proportion of visitors to a museum out of 4 different age groups over a period of 30

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, commencing from 1980.

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all age groups experienced fluctuations, those who were over 50

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old were most interested in visiting

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site. At the beginning of the period, the percentage of people over 50

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old was just under 50%, which was the highest rate among others.

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, it decreased gradually to finish at 40%. In sharp contrast to

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, 15-24-year-olds began at 20%,

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it increased moderately to peak around 25% in 1990.

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, it remained steady for 15

years

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, and suddenly it dropped to reach the same rate as its starting level. 25-34 and 35-49 year olds began well under 40%. Surprisingly, there was a declining trend for both to record just under 30% in 1990, and both went up. From 1995 to 2010, they

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off to finish at their starting proportion. j

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The graph below shows the percentage of people visiting a museum at least once a year between 1980 and 2010.

Air travel is responsible for a lot of pollution in our environment. Some people think that prices of airplane tickets should be increased in order to reduce air traffic.

For some people, shopping is not just about buying what is necessary, but is a form of entertainment. Do you think it is a positive or negative development?

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Many people use new forms of technology to communicate these days. What are the positive effects of the student on personal and professional relationships? Could online forms of communication lead to superficial connections?

Your neighbor has recently written to you to complain about the noise from your house. Write a letter to your neighbor. In your letter: - Explain the reasons for the noise, - Apologise - Describe what action you will take.