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The table below shows the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. The charts show the result of surveys asking visitors who satisfied they were with their visit, during the same two periods. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparison where relevant.

The table illustrates the number of visitors to Ashdown
Museum
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 , which changed before and after the renovation of the
museum
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. Meanwhile, pie
charts
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 show the outcomes of a survey by asking some questions associated with the satisfaction of their visit during
two
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the two
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 years. The table shows that before the refurbishment of the
museum
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, 74,000 individuals visited the
museum
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,
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however
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, that value increased to 18,000 after the changes in the
museum
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. The pie
charts
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 demonstrate that before the
museum
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 renovation, 40 per
cent
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 of the public were not satisfied with the
museum
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 that value decreased to 25 per
cent
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 after the renovation. As the information is gathered from the
charts
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, only 15% were very satisfied with the old
museum
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,
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;
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in contrast
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, that percentage elevated to 35% in the new
museum
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. The difference between
satisfaction
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the satisfaction
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ratio
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ratios
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 in both
charts
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 was 10 per
cent
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 in both years. There is an interesting point that the percentage of no response remained the same in both years. Meanwhile,
very
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the very
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 dissatisfied value fell to 5 per
cent
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 after the refurbishment.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words museum, charts, cent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "show" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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